"What If?" Fairytale Blogfest
Today begins the "What If?" Fairytale Blogfest and I am excited to share my entry. I have had it picked out since Morgan Shamy first announced it, so imagine my surprise upon checking out her page to find that she had picked the same fairy tale. Great minds think alike! She went the way of the love story, but I am of a little darker bent and chose to join Team Tragedy. I hope you enjoy my little 300 word piece.
What if the queen hadn't figured out Rumplestiltskin's name by the end of the 3rd day?
My Scene(exactly 300 words)
The ominous beat of the drums vibrated the
ground beneath her feet as Queen Serena made her way toward the platform that
floated amid the sea of silent spectators. Head high, she fought against the
weight of her grief even as her tears made glistening tracks down her cheeks. She
could feel the King’s gaze boring into her, his words at discovering the reason
for their missing child imprinted in her mind forever.
So that's it! I hope you like my little "What if?" flash fiction.
“What kind of woman
barters her child to save her own life? You are a liar and a fraud, undeserving
of being called queen or the mother of a prince.”
She reached the platform and turned to face the balcony
overlooking the crowd.
The drums stopped
as the king stood. “Queen Serena, you are guilty of lying to your king, of
false claims, and of arranging to have the heir to the kingdom kidnapped. The
punishment for these charges is death by beheading. Have you any last words?”
She met the cold eyes of her once beloved
King and remembered when those same eyes filled with desire, amusement, and
love for her. At her silence, the King gestured for the execution to commence.
She knelt before the box and bent at the
waist until the rough grain of the wood pressed into her cheek. As the sound of
steel sliding free echoed around the courtyard, the queen broke her silence. “If
I could go back, knowing where this would end, I would make the same choice.”
The air whistled as the sword swung toward her, but she continued to speak. “Having
you love me and having these few precious months with our son is worth the
price.”
Her last thought was relief as the King surged
to his feet, his grief and love written across his face.So that's it! I hope you like my little "What if?" flash fiction.
Wow! That brought tears to my eyes. So moving! You did a great job :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much! I really enjoyed writing it.
DeleteSabrina! Who are you?!?!?! LOL! That was totally tragic in an awesome way! Loved your writing. And great story! Great minds DO think alike! Love the way you took this! :D
ReplyDeleteOh, you know, just your typical, slightly odd, but really fun to hang around, writer! Hehehehe. Glad you liked it.
DeleteWow. That was gripping. Good job, Sabrina. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Linda. I didn't want to stop at 300 words.
DeleteAhhh! A perfect WHAT IF question, and the tale to follow. WOW! Very tragic and gripping. :(
ReplyDeleteThanks, Leigh. My imagination took off.
DeleteGah! What a heart-ripper. Lovely imagery, I could see it all right up to the moment of the King's regret. Lovely writing. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much! I am so glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteWOW! That was amazing and completely tragic. Great job :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, lady! I tend to write a little dark, though this usually surprises those that know me.
DeleteOH that was SO good!! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteI am so glad you like it!
DeleteMuch as it would have been... nailed it! :)
ReplyDeleteI thought so too!
DeleteDying to know- did he make it on time? But alas, I don't think so. Great twist.
ReplyDeleteA2Z Mommy and What’s In Between
I love cliff hangers, don't you?! *wink*
DeleteOoh, you really made me feel for her! Very nicely done. Love the ambiguous ending too - did he stop the execution?
ReplyDeleteThat is something that we may never know...but then again, I might just finish this story someday.
DeleteGreat job! How tragic for all involved. I can definitely see this ending being realistic for the story.
ReplyDeleteI definitely agree, Shannon. Thanks so much.
DeleteWow. I'm wondering too if he stopped it in time.
ReplyDeleteDon't ya just love a good cliff hanger!
DeleteDamn, Sabrina, this was incredibly enticing! Love the little twist you did.
ReplyDeleteGosh, I'm so sorry I didn't get a chance to join this blogfest. Things have been so hard as of late and I'm barely bobbing above water right now. But next time! Oh, you had best believe I'll join the next one.
Have a great day!
Ah, sorry you missed it. I truly look forward to seeing what you come up with for the next one.
DeleteFelicitations on winning! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteThat was stunning! And with an excellent cliff hanger! Congratulations!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteSo sad. Stinkin' Rumplestilskin! :(
ReplyDeleteCongrats on winning Team Tragedy's award... Excellent work, I'm well impressed.
ReplyDeleteCan I talk you into Comedy next year :)
LOL! You just never know what I will come up with, especially with a whole year to think about it! Hehehe!
DeleteDefinitely deserving of the top prize. Congratulations Sabrina!!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Sheena.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
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